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Just had this one rejected from a publication, so I'm looking for comments/critiques from y'all to try and make it better.
Not that I would want to lead your reading, but there are some points I want people to consider:
Are the descriptions of him scratching too graphic, not graphic enough, or too 'obvious'?
Is the progression of belief smooth? Does it make sense that he believes that the girl is his cat? Or, more importantly, does it niggle you that he might do that, so that you think perhaps something is wrong with him?
The ending. Make sense or not?
Not that I would want to lead your reading, but there are some points I want people to consider:
Are the descriptions of him scratching too graphic, not graphic enough, or too 'obvious'? Is the progression of belief smooth? Does it make sense that he believes that the girl is his cat? Or, more importantly, does it niggle you that he might do that, so that you think perhaps something is wrong with him? The ending. Make sense or not?Mature
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Well, I don't know if I have anything constructive to say, but I enjoyed the story... although I would like something a little bit more definite regarding if he's just crazy, if the girl really is his cat, and if so if she really was hunting him... and if she really was his cat and really was hunting him, why? I guess she'd be kind of mad about him starting neglecting her when he got an allergy; but there is almost this indication that the allergy is something that the cat is doing intentionally, and why would the cat have started causing such an itch originally? I'm guessing he's crazy and it's just his own guilt... but maybe not.