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Goodness! My message centre has rather asploded in the last 24 hours. A huge thank you to ^Beccalicious for the DD. I'm having a bit of a cruddy time at the moment--nothing major, just a lot of waiting for things to happen and the frustration that comes with it--so this made me grin like an idiot. Shall respond to each and every comment once I return from cooking dinner! :>>>

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Re-uploaded by request for *Dancing-Naked. Hope this helps you recall your old memories!

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Image credit: Tim Caynes via CC license.

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This is for `WineWriter's Time Travel competition, I'm not entirely sure if it actually qualifies, since no-one travels in time. But we'll see!

I'm new to this script-writing gig (i.e. about twenty-minutes-ago new) so I'm looking for some feedback on the format, the flow, the props, that sort of thing. Whether I described the movements well, or if there's bits in our mind missing.

Oh, and any confusion about the actual premise of this would be great. I know it's a little hard to follow, so any comments on how easy it is to 'get' would be great!

Thanks guys, hope you enjoy!
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Daily Deviation

Given 2011-08-14
Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow by `apocathary captures time personified into the office and shares the mayhem each character causes for one another. ( Featured by BeccaJS )
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draensham Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Bravo, this is genius!
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apocathary Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks you! :bow:
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rhianne-dostya97 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012
Might I just say that I am in love with this to the point where I would perform it in my acting class should I ever have the chance? Hell, reminds me of my own everyday stress too. "I need this done by tomorrow, but I'm dead if I don't finish this today and I just wish I could have figured out time management much earlier." The subsections of time are weapons against human sanity sometimes.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, thank you very much! I'm not ordinarily a screenplay kind of person, so it's really nice that people have connected with this one. And oh man, time management is not one of my fortes. I'm terrible at organising myself! :<
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rhianne-dostya97 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Same, it's a wonder my lowest grade is a C-. I'll be sure to look through your other writings when I have a spare moment. :meow:
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Princessadeli Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
I really don't have the proper compliment for this but this was worth reading from beginning to end; a great personification of Today, Tomorrow, and Time. I was wondering why you chose the names to be so similar until you reveal that they are just abbreviations. I might have to read it a few more times to get the actual message but I have no doubt that I'll enjoy every re-read.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks heaps for reading mate, so glad people got a kick out of this one. :D
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Princessadeli Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
You're very welcome!
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KuraiOujou Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
I really don't know how to word a comment for this! Mainly since it's getting so much attention two and a half years later...though better late than never.

I feel very compelled to read more literature on dA now, thanks for that :] It can never be bad to read more!
Your play on words is fun and clever (Yes' men, my favorite). I'm glad that I mostly understood who each person was before the big reveal. And how easily I could relate to Tim's worries is a huge plus! Normally, I can't be bothered to understand more than I need to. But I know that Today can suck, and Tomorrow even more; especially for Time.

Oh, I'm glad I clicked this DD :] Very worth the read, and the recognition.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, yeah gotta say it was a bit of a surprise! But hey, I'll take it. ;P

Thanks for reading mate, seriously appreciate it. Now get on out there and read some more lit on dA! :D Try going through my favourites if you want, there's quite a few great stories in there.
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TheLegendWriter Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Mind blown! This piece was amazing! I've read it about 20 times now and I still love it! Everything flowed so perfectly together, and it was so easy to get. I love what you did with their names, Tod, Tom and Tim. At first I must admit I thought that it was just a coinky dink that made their names all start with T, and that Tod and Tom were slightly similar to Today and Tomorrow.

Tomorrow and Today's outfits contrasted each other nicely. The fact that Tom had a slightly more futuristic feel to it was a genius move, and it really made the whole thing seem realistic, especially when Tod's outfit was more... "normal".

The way Tod and Tom bicker for Tim's attention and work reminded me of two siblings fighting over something. I don't know if that's what you were going for, but that is definitely the feel I got.

Amazing work!
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm flattered, seriously! Always a blast when someone likes reading my stuff. And yeah, they were definitely intended to be sibling-like rivals. Thanks again for reading!
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TheLegendWriter Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :D
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Ra1nDanc3r Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Student Photographer
WOW THAT SO COOL!
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading mate! :>
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Tuesday-Francesca Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
[wearing a shit-eating grin]

^ I have never heard that expression before. I instantly fell in love with it.
Seriously though, I read it twice, this was brill, with a few subtle little messages in there too. Bravo! :)
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Isn't it the best? Thanks for reading mate, much appreciated. :)
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ssnowsongs Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is simply amazing! I didn't realise the associations with Tod(ay), Tim(e) and Tom(orrow). At the end, it made so much sense! Congrats on the DD.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
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FridolinFroehlich Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
THE CAGE [link]
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
wut?
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ImagineTheEnding Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
For some reason, this whole time I imagined Time as Kevin Spacey. I'm not sure why. I like this piece, by the way. The DDs are always very good in the writing category.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks mate, appreciate your support for my writing. Having readers keeps me going, don't cha know! :D
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ImagineTheEnding Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
And I just recognized your screen name. Of course I like this piece. You're my favorite writer on DA.
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Sachiaoitori Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Student General Artist
...Wow.
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flakface Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I enjoyed this. :)
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much for reading. :)
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flakface Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nooot a problem! :D
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wHaede Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
omg i love it ! I dont even know how I stumbled across this but I started reading and got hooked.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Cheers bud, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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OblivionDawn Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
This...

This needs to be in books.

Like, college books.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, I'm sure there's a great deal of canon authors that need to be studied before a random dude from down under, but I'll take the compliment for sure! Thanks mate. :)
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IceLiquidizer Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
nice! very interesting ^^
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Cheers! :beer:
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HellsPlumber Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
This is probably the first time I've ever felt compelled to read literature here on dA. The peice really drew me in right from the beggining and I couldnt help but read on to see how the story played out.

The twist at the end with the names worked really well, was an "oooooh!" moment =)

Congrats on the daily deviation, you deserve it! =D
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That is high praise indeed, and I'm glad you started your dAlit journey with me! :D Now get on out there and read some more awesomeness! :reading:
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HellsPlumber Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Glad I did too =)
Sure thing :salute:
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Zazzatron Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Zomg, brilliantly executed I must say!
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Ta buddy, I'm glad it worked out for readers! :D
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Zazzatron Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D
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GabiLipan Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this! :D
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks mate! :w00t:
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nnaj Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
Hahaha, that was great! :D I really enjoyed the concept, well worth the DD (congratulations btw).

It kinda makes me wonder about the laws and structure of the rest of this world but I get the feeling that this was only a one time world made up for a one time idea and you don't have any blueprints for an expanded universe or something.
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And yeah, definitely a one-shot. I think it'd be a bit difficult to have every time-based concept running around as an anthropomorphic representation. Though some authors do a pretty good job for a few of them (Pratchett with his Death character, for example).
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nnaj Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Discworld was actually what I was thinking about when I wrote that because you probably would be able to pull it off, it'd just end up pretty insane :XD:
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SaveTheCRT Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
Wow! Loved it! But if time quit, wouldn't everything be erased?
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Probably! Either that, or Today and Tomorrow would have to do their own filing for a change while Time continued, but had a holiday. ;P
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SaveTheCRT Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Good theory you have there :XD:
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RockV60 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Love it! :] just a small typo: 'TOM. Not until you admit you're jut a flash in the pan compared to me. '
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apocathary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Eagle eyes! nice spot, I'll fix it that up as soon as I get through this mountain of messages :faint:.
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